<p dir="auto"><em>A couple lay in bed. It is early, and the birds are singing. As the light fills the room through the open blinds, the woman slowly wakes, turning toward the man and wrapping her arms around him. He stirs and grabs her hands, kisses them. There is a number of ways to show the intimacy between them, but it certainly is a scene of cosiness and familiar love. On the bedside table is a vintage calander clock with large white letters and numbers, clearly visible to the audience. The clock reads is February 14. It is 6.30 am.
<p dir="auto"><strong>River (mumbles sleepily): Coffee?
<p dir="auto"><strong>Stone: Does the pope shit in the woods?
<p dir="auto"><em>River rises, looks at the clock, and then moves off stage. There is the sound of a kettle being turned on, mugs pulled from the cupboard, eggs frying, the kettle boiling, and various other kitchen sounds. Stone is still fast asleep.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River (appears on stage, whispering. She again looks at the clock.): Babe, wake up.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone (sleepy, disorientated and confused): Wait - what? Breakfast? What did you do? Are these the eggs of a guilty conscience? Did you sleep with Roger again?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River (laughes briefly, semi-tolerantly): I will if you don't wake up and take this plate off me.
<p dir="auto"><em>He sits up fast, grabs the coffee from her and places it on the bedside table. River places the plate beside it where yellow eggs glisten on top of thick slabs of toast. She smiles.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: What’s up? Why are you spoiling me?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: No reason. Just love you, is all.
<p dir="auto"><em>Again, she looks to the clock. She climbs into bed and instantly splashes her coffee on the doona. He laughs as she swears and grabs a towel to dab it up.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: Twenty lonnnnnng yeeeeaaaars.
<p dir="auto"><em>He says it jokingly. The words are drawn out as if he is being patient, as if he has put up with her spilling coffee on the bed before.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: Don’t spill crumbs on the sheets.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: I won’t!
<p dir="auto"><em>She is annoyed and snaps at him, as if she had expected him to reprimand her. The plate on her lap tilts onto the doona and a piece of toast slides onto the bed.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: For fuck’s sake, babe!
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: Sorry! Sorry!
<p dir="auto"><em>She begins to sweep crumbs, but he is clearly annoyed. The mood is tense, as if there are small storms passing an otherwise peaceful morning. He is foccussed on eating and checking his phone, she on her coffee. She looks at the clock often, but he doesn't notice. There is an awkward silence between them, the scrape of cutlery against plates, the cups being lifted and placed again on the bedside tables, until breakfast is done.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: Babe, I’m sorry - just you know I hate crumbs in the bed.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: Yeah but you don’t have to get so bloody annoyed!
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: I’m not. Honestly. Thanks so much for the tasty eggs. You are the Queen of Scrambled Eggs. You are my Egg Queen. My buttered toast. My warm cuppa coffee. My ...
<p dir="auto"><em>Stone turns towards her to hug her but she moves away from him and is up and out of bed.. She is clearly annoyed. He looks puzzled.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: Babe, what’s up?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River (calls from the en suite, over the sound of running water. Her voice is short, tense, as if something is wrong): Nothing. I’m just having a shower.
<p dir="auto"><em>Stone joins her. The audience can hear the sound of running water but just sees the unmade bed and the mess of the morning. They hear murmuring voices underneath the sound of the shower, and the occasional whoop of laughter. It should be made clear that this is a couple that have already got over the morning’s tension. Before long the couple emerge, get dressed, and make the bed together. They squabble, but in a joking way, where she berates him for not fluffing the pillows properly and folding the top sheet over the doona in a particular way. He stands to salute, mocking her as if she is being too military. She throws a pillow at him, knocking a coffee cup onto the wooden floor and then freezing, staring at him as if waiting for harsh words.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone (laughing, incredulous): How do you do it?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River (wails): I don’t KNOW!
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: gesturing toward the other side of the bed where the teatowel used to wipe up the coffee sits on the floor: Go on then, grab the teatowel. Quick!
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River (throwing him the teatowel): I feel like such a klutz. I wanted you to have a nice morning.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone (reaching for her again, but this time she lets allows the hug. The wet teatowel still in his hand): I did baby. But I have to go to work - sorry I’m such a grumpy bastard.
<p dir="auto"><strong>River: It’s okay. Happy Valentine’s Day, by the way.
<p dir="auto"><strong>Stone: Oh shit.
<p dir="auto"><em>He looks at the clock, facepalms himself.
<p dir="auto"><strong>River (snatching the tea towel from him): Forget again?
<p dir="auto"><strong>Stone: You know I’m bad with dates.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: You know I couldn’t care less, right?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: You know you’re my beautiful wife?
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>River: Suck.
<p dir="auto"><strong><em>Stone: Yes please.
<p dir="auto"><em>River slaps him with the teatowel, and he moves away from her, laughing, as she does it again. The camera focuses on the immaculately made bed as they leave the room. The banter continues as the stage lights fade, and there is the sound of a dishwasher being packed in the background, and the front door slamming on an empty house and the distant calls of ‘love you’ and ‘see you tonight’, until at last there is only the sound of birdsong.
<p dir="auto"><strong>Image co created on Midjourney by me and the AI. The play is in response to the Cinnamon Cup Coffee Club community Valentine's Day Writing Challenge.
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Breakfast In Bed
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I love the symbolic names you’ve chosen for the protagonists. I love the slow easy mature and comfortable love between Stone and River and how much it reflects reality, but at the same time reflects a vitality that radiates freshness and frivolity. Great read (as usual) ✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨❤️💕
Thanks Itso. I did baulk at writing a love story for Valentine's but it was kinda fun playing with the play format. Still I think I'm missing something but can't quite place it. X It's very reflective of real life, mostly. He hates crumbs in the bed, and I'm the river tumbling round him. We get over shit super fast, even forgetting what we were meant to remember.
I love it, an everyday scene but at the same time full of love, the kind that doesn't look at special dates but is always there every morning. ♡
You nailed it - it's not about the special date, but about being round every day, and loving despite the little annoying things like bad bed making and crumbs in the sheets!
Nice read even if you stereotyped us guys. What guy has ever forgot Valentine's Day? 🤣 My wife and I ran a business for 10 years and Valentine's Day was a huge event. We worked crazy hours and sometimes my wife would get a hotel near one of the locations to catch a few hours of sleep without having to commute home. Needless to say Val was not a holiday we celebrated much.
Hahah I didn't mean to stereotype. I pay no attention to VDAY and when I was asked to write something I initially say no (in my head, more like fuck no!). It's an American thing too - yuk, no offence. But it seems all consumery to me. Of course I'd resist - if you know me at all by now, I probably ain't going to do something coz an ad told me too, haha, or some dumb social thing... but random gestures of love, yeah. So Jamie gets scrambled eggs at least once a week, and not jsut on Valentines Day. And I am absolutely the Queen of Scrambled Eggs.
This comment is legendary 😂
Haha thanks
I loved ALL of this.
The banter was amazing and REAL 👍
I was smiling at every line.
Thank you so much for joining this contest 😁
THankyou so much! @itsostylish begged me to whip something up (kinda) so how could I say no to you lovely folk?
Hehe! Glad you did 🙌
I really liked this!! Such an essential being in love scene... How you showcase each lovers "faults", and then show us how they are so happy anyhow. That's what it's all about I think :). Valentine's day? It's everyday 💚
This read like a play 100%, but with the flair of short fiction. You're a star 😍
I think a good play uses the narrator to set the scene really well and uses stage directions so it 'reads' like a short story, if you know what I mean? So I was having fun experimenting with the form. Gee I love Hive for helping me push the envelope. Thanks so much @grindan, this is lovely coming from someone as high calibre a writer as yourself, and I beam every time you drop by..
Excellent style and story. The script could very well be turned into a short flick because of its vivid imagery. It looks like it was fun to write!
It WAS super fun, especially as it's not something I normally do. Don't you think sometimes writing is a joyful PLAY with structure and form, rhythm, contrast, etc etc? Like it doesn't just blurt out, it has to be shaped and moulded, and when it comes together it's sooo fun! But I am positive you know exactly what I'm talking about, guru!
Absolutely. I enjoy it when I can feel the rhythm of the piece. Its overall flow. I think that's why Stephen King wrote that an author should be thinking in paragraphs and not just sentences. Glad to see you're enjoying the process!
What book is that? I mean Stephen King.
It's called On Writing: A memoir of the craft. Excellent book for learning a few tricks about writing fiction.
Thank you!
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Everything about this post was so beautiful. I was full of smiles. Their constant banter reaffirms how long they've been together.
And of course, he forgot. But the easy way with which she let go confirms their love. Exquisite.✨
Hehe, you totally got it! I mean, she could give him the silent treatment, right? But that's not love, that's just being bitchy.
Feels like I could learn a whole lot from you two
Soooooo real! Your play has everything. The touch, a stroke of the author and the dazzle of experience. I really love it. I saw everything. It was so vivid and the characters were adorable. I could even see their faces. Jeez.
Excellent!
AWW, really? Thanks so much. Appreciated. Honestly I could barely write before HIve four years ago bahahahaha...
hehe a slice of real life in a play. What fun! Loved the banter between these two - seems it may be art imitating life !LOLZ I love it when people draw on real life and then run a layer of fiction over the top. I reckon that had I been in the stalls watching this, I would have been chuckling away... these two are so relatable😂😂😂Nice job, Riverflows 💗 ... oh and that Stylish hehe... she is the person who always pushes me to write... and one of the only ones who succeed... cos... she is @itsostylish after all and she knows how to get me to write 😂😂😂🤗💞 !LUV
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It was so much fun fictionalizing our own couple banter. Made it more authentic. I really must read it to him. I'm sure he will recognize the couple of which I speak 😂
ROFLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL I am sure he will love it!!! And if he doesn't... be sure to sprinkle copious amounts of toast crumbs between the sheets next time !LOLZ !LUV
And yes... @itsostylish is da boss!! hahaha
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But I loovvve toast in bed....
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